Sunday, May 29, 2011

Fun with j-grammar

It really is easy to get your feet crossed when you're writing in a hurry:

For a $12 roundtrip ticket, patrons could catch a ride and not have to worry about the sparse and sometimes high cost of parking as well as the dangers of driving after drinking.

I think you can just about make it work, in a sort of rococo way:

the sparse (and sometimes high cost of) parking 

... but "the sparse and costly parking" seems a lot easier on the ears.



Blogger Jan said...

And while we're editing, how about that "as well as"? Let's make it "not have to worry about ... parking OR the dangers of driving after drinking," no?

11:54 AM, May 29, 2011  

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