Fun with j-grammar
It really is easy to get your feet crossed when you're writing in a hurry:
For a $12 roundtrip ticket, patrons could catch a ride and not have to worry about the sparse and sometimes high cost of parking as well as the dangers of driving after drinking.
I think you can just about make it work, in a sort of rococo way:
the sparse (and sometimes high cost of) parking
... but "the sparse and costly parking" seems a lot easier on the ears.
For a $12 roundtrip ticket, patrons could catch a ride and not have to worry about the sparse and sometimes high cost of parking as well as the dangers of driving after drinking.
I think you can just about make it work, in a sort of rococo way:
the sparse (and sometimes high cost of) parking
... but "the sparse and costly parking" seems a lot easier on the ears.
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posted by fev at 9:58 AM
1 Comments:
And while we're editing, how about that "as well as"? Let's make it "not have to worry about ... parking OR the dangers of driving after drinking," no?
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