Double the forbidden fun
What's worse than a "Holy [np], Batman!" hed? A second one with the jump!
Those aren't the last of the problems, of course. If the (ahem) Detroit paper is going to run a five-day-old pickup about the (kaff) Woodward Dream Cruise, if might want to tweak the second graf to "today," from "this month," for such was the date of the Dream Cruise. And it could consider whether the Dream Cruise is a "car show" -- unlike the Bloomfield Township event heralded with the jump, which appears to be one. It might even wonder (a) how much "roaring down Woodward" there is during the cruise (hint: not much) and (b) why anyone would expect to see the thing at the Dream Cruise when it's sitting at a dealership for the bulk of the scheduled cruise.
Those aren't the last of the problems, of course. If the (ahem) Detroit paper is going to run a five-day-old pickup about the (kaff) Woodward Dream Cruise, if might want to tweak the second graf to "today," from "this month," for such was the date of the Dream Cruise. And it could consider whether the Dream Cruise is a "car show" -- unlike the Bloomfield Township event heralded with the jump, which appears to be one. It might even wonder (a) how much "roaring down Woodward" there is during the cruise (hint: not much) and (b) why anyone would expect to see the thing at the Dream Cruise when it's sitting at a dealership for the bulk of the scheduled cruise.
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