Thursday, November 02, 2017

Diagramming party to action stations

If you were having trouble telling who did what to (how many of) whom from the hed, wait until you get to the Fair 'n' Balanced lede:
 
A man charged with fatally stabbing and shooting a popular Ohio middle school teacher was engaged to her daughter and a pallbearer at her funeral, officials said Tuesday.

The local Fox affiliate provided an example for your editing midterm:

STRONGSVILLE, Ohio -  Strongsville Police Chief Mark Fender announced Tuesday that 20-year-old Jeffrey Scullin, the fiance of murder victim Melinda Pleskovic's daughter, has been arrested in her death.

... while the AP seems to have kept its eye on the ball:

STRONGSVILLE, Ohio — A man charged with fatally stabbing and shooting a popular middle school teacher was engaged to her daughter, police said Tuesday.

 That's Fox for you. Come for the paranoia, stay for the diagramming.

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