Sunday, December 12, 2010

Out-of-tune lede of the day

Writers hate to be told that their heartbreaking bursts of alliteration don't work, but -- better before publication than after publication, don't you think?

I don't think all those verbs can coordinate with "Saturday." Being loved in general is one thing; being loved on a specific day is several others.

If you've kept up with the Edwards family, you can probably figure out what the dangling phrase at the end is up to. Otherwise, good luck.

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