Wednesday, April 16, 2008

Who's got the gun?

Driver hit bicyclist with gun, police say
A Columbia man was arrested last night on suspicion of hitting another man in the head with a gun after an apparent traffic dispute, police said.

Quick, which one has the gun?
[Driver hit] [bicyclist with gun]
[Driver hit] [bicyclist] [with gun]

It's easy to tell in the lede, because of the extra prepositional phrase between "man" and "with a gun." It's tricker in the hed, and thus a good argument for trading the ambiguous detail for a different approach:

Driver accused of assault after dispute

You can't have everything in a hed. Might as well have one thing you know, rather than one thing that could be a couple of things.



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