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That's why the cutline here looks so odd: A Columbia firefighter waits at the mezzanine level of Gates Rubber Co. at 3015 LeMone Industrial Blvd. today after a machine caught fire at the plant in southeast Columbia. Once you've stated the specific address, backing out to the general "in southeast Columbia" is out of place. Sounds as if the cutline writer was trying to pack in information from the story (usually a good idea) but forgot that such data usually go in a predictable way.
And the hed is enough to make you swear off the active voice for life:
Fire evacuates employees
Uh, no. The employees might have evacuated the building, or the company might have evacuated its employees, or the employees might have been evacuated, but the fire didn't evacuate anybody.
And whatever happened to a good old-fashioned THOUSANDS FLEE EARTHQUAKE, anyway? Even if it's just a couple dozen?
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"Swear off the active voice for life." Perfect.
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