Saturday, May 18, 2013

Local anesthesia

Today's editing tip: Spice up those boring stories about global extinction by inserting a local angle!

LAT original:
It's 1.7 miles long. Its surface is covered in a sticky black substance similar to the gunk at the bottom of a barbecue. If it impacted Earth it would probably result in global extinction. Good thing it is just making a flyby.

Asteroid 1998 QE2 will make its closest pass to Earth on May 31 at 1:59 p.m. PDT.

Improved with localization:
An asteroid about 1.7 miles long and covered in a sticky substance is barreling toward Earth. Fortunately, when it gets to its closest point to Detroit at 4:59 p.m. May 31, it will still be some 3.6 million miles away. And good thing: because if the rock named 1998 QE2 smacked Earth it would probably result in global extinction. 

Got it? This is going to be on the final.



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