Tuesday, January 25, 2011

This should be embarrassing (a slight return)

Q: How do you top a lede like "Sometimes, late at night ..."?

A: First, repeat the assertion! Garnish with "told the Free Press last week." Then add more random hearsay!

Alert readers will note that the graf from the print edition shown here has been improved for online use:

Police have said the suspect was reportedly driving a dark-colored car, possibly a Grand Am. A man who lives in the neighborhood and had contact with the man in custody, said he believed police towed away a black car Wednesday, the day the suspect was arrested.

And the same random comma -- the one between the subject and the predicate -- has made its way into the online lede as well.

It is worth noting that the suspect has been arraigned.


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